ghostrunner wrote:sighyoung wrote:
I can see why you would like Whitman, but why Cummings? Much of his poetry is, well, written in exceptionally traditional meters and rhyme schemes? He writes tons of sonnets that are simply rearranged visually through typographical manipulation.
Well, here's one I like:
i like my body when it is with your
body. It is so quite new a thing.
Muscles better and nerves more.
i like your body. i like what it does,
i like its hows. i like to feel the spine
of your body and its bones, and the trembling
-firm-smooth ness and which i will
again and again and again
kiss, i like kissing this and that of you,
i like, slowly stroking the, shocking fuzz
of your electric fur, and what-is-it comes
over parting flesh . . . . And eyes big love-crumbs,
and possibly i like the thrill
of under me you so quite new
no rhyming there, and if there's a rhythm it's not readily apparent to me. some of his stuff is more conversational, at least in the way I read it.
It's not written in a strict meter, but there is a general iambic rhythm that cummings varies considerably (he is writing about sex, after all).
Lots of regular iambic stretches ("I like its hows. I like to feel the spine" is a strict iambic pentameter line), but as things heat up, the rhythm shifts to lots of triple-foot substitution ("of your body and its bones and the trembling") and brief emphasis when the speaker gets really excited ("firm smoothness"), as well as verbal and rhythmic repetition ("and again and again and again").
cummings then returns to a pretty regular iambic rhythm with slight variations( "kissing this and that of you") with slight variations when the speaker gets really worked up ("i like slowly stroking the shocking fuzz").
In other words, you're right--there's no rigid meter here (ideally, iambically metered poems often don't sound mannered like da-
dum da-
dum da-
dum anyway--most are quite conversational), but cummings is subtly using rhythmic changes to emphasize the pleasures and changes of sexual activity here--all quite subtly, as you say. But cummings knows enough about meter to pull off these rhythmic shifts quite well, which consistently (and unobtrusively) serve his meaning (much like film music often adds emotional tone to scenes without overwhelming the visual proceedings, to return to your musical comparison).